10-08-2011, 03:01 AM
I have taken all your suggestions to heart. Thank you, each of you, for such generous feedback.
Todd, Anansi is perfect.
"in the center of pearlescent secrets is a great description of not only the web, but it makes you think of the secrets as vibrations on the web--as if the secrets were prey. Metaphorically, I guess the speaker is someone who appears delicate and unobtrusive (the foot of the world might speak to a meek social positon, or to someone easily overlooked).
The last two lines tell us that what we think we see with this person is not what we really see. Intentionally may simply mean that it was their intention or simply that it was a design from nature they cannot help but be what they are--but whatever that is it isn't delicate." I think I would love to pick your mind some day. You read me very well.
Todd, Anansi is perfect.
"in the center of pearlescent secrets is a great description of not only the web, but it makes you think of the secrets as vibrations on the web--as if the secrets were prey. Metaphorically, I guess the speaker is someone who appears delicate and unobtrusive (the foot of the world might speak to a meek social positon, or to someone easily overlooked).
The last two lines tell us that what we think we see with this person is not what we really see. Intentionally may simply mean that it was their intention or simply that it was a design from nature they cannot help but be what they are--but whatever that is it isn't delicate." I think I would love to pick your mind some day. You read me very well.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?