10-07-2011, 03:19 PM
@ Rob - I don't know what to say except thank you for your praise. I have considered switching the second 'each' to 'every', but in my head it doesn't work. I do understand the desire for a few extra syllables, though, as I beat my head against it at first when I was writing.
@Leanne - praise from you is amazing. I am more than happy to quicken your poetic pulse. Thanks for the 'new' colloquialism.
I have heeded your thoughts on 'religious' (as well as Todd's). I have slipped 'thiesm' in instead, although I am wondering about 'doctrinal'? Since it is only a one word difference I just did a quick edit.
@ Ca ne fait rien - My sincerest gratitude. I can not think of a nicer compliment. Women are inherently majikal creatures as far as I'm concerned.
@ Billy - Thank you so much. Yom Kippur is close - the honeyed apples and wine are a reference to Rosh Hashana. The apples signify a sweet year to come. Yom Kippur is a complete fast, not even water is consumed.
@ Todd - Thank you, in leaps in bounds. Your insights and suggestions tend to floor me just a little bit. Your reaction to strophe 2 is pretty much dead on.
This poem means many things to me. It is about self-discovery, majik, mystery, connection... to all organic life, but also a quest for God. The title is multi-functional, for me at least. I wrote it on the New Moon. The new moon is a powerful time for weaving majik, ensuring prosperity, ushering in gifts and healing. It also marks the beginning of Rosh Hashana.
The multiplicity of sins vs sin has to do with the ritual of placing bread into ones pockets and walking to running water and tossing the bread crumbs into it - symbolic of casting away sins accumulated over the past year.
Inscribed is indeed a powerful word, as it alludes to being inscribed into the book of life for another year.
Burrowing IS primal. I chose shrinking because to me some of the echoes of the past, of answers or myths I long to touch are ebbing away. What do you think of ebbing?
Plastic is two-fold, meant both as pliable and artificial.
Judaism, more pointedly the Hasidic sects and Kabbalah are very mystical, especially the study of Gematria.
I could go on at length, but I prefer some of the mystery or individual impressions to be left in tact. I truly appreciate every comment and insight. It's amazing to know you can each connect to pieces of myself I have dropped here.
@Leanne - praise from you is amazing. I am more than happy to quicken your poetic pulse. Thanks for the 'new' colloquialism.
I have heeded your thoughts on 'religious' (as well as Todd's). I have slipped 'thiesm' in instead, although I am wondering about 'doctrinal'? Since it is only a one word difference I just did a quick edit.@ Ca ne fait rien - My sincerest gratitude. I can not think of a nicer compliment. Women are inherently majikal creatures as far as I'm concerned.
@ Billy - Thank you so much. Yom Kippur is close - the honeyed apples and wine are a reference to Rosh Hashana. The apples signify a sweet year to come. Yom Kippur is a complete fast, not even water is consumed.
@ Todd - Thank you, in leaps in bounds. Your insights and suggestions tend to floor me just a little bit. Your reaction to strophe 2 is pretty much dead on.
This poem means many things to me. It is about self-discovery, majik, mystery, connection... to all organic life, but also a quest for God. The title is multi-functional, for me at least. I wrote it on the New Moon. The new moon is a powerful time for weaving majik, ensuring prosperity, ushering in gifts and healing. It also marks the beginning of Rosh Hashana.
The multiplicity of sins vs sin has to do with the ritual of placing bread into ones pockets and walking to running water and tossing the bread crumbs into it - symbolic of casting away sins accumulated over the past year.
Inscribed is indeed a powerful word, as it alludes to being inscribed into the book of life for another year.
Burrowing IS primal. I chose shrinking because to me some of the echoes of the past, of answers or myths I long to touch are ebbing away. What do you think of ebbing?
Plastic is two-fold, meant both as pliable and artificial.
Judaism, more pointedly the Hasidic sects and Kabbalah are very mystical, especially the study of Gematria.
I could go on at length, but I prefer some of the mystery or individual impressions to be left in tact. I truly appreciate every comment and insight. It's amazing to know you can each connect to pieces of myself I have dropped here.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?