10-07-2011, 08:12 AM
Thanks Billy and Philatone-
Some food for thought for revision there- I think I will lose the last two lines on the next edit- I was not sure of them,and re- reading see them as a bit preachy and meaningless on reflection. Cheers Billy.
Philatone- thanks I will have another look at line breaks- I see a few already that would work better, Thanks for the suggestions- there can never be too many suggestions.
Some food for thought for revision there- I think I will lose the last two lines on the next edit- I was not sure of them,and re- reading see them as a bit preachy and meaningless on reflection. Cheers Billy.
Philatone- thanks I will have another look at line breaks- I see a few already that would work better, Thanks for the suggestions- there can never be too many suggestions.

