Daytime Drama

[billy]

one-legged hop
into drip-dried Levi's
tacky headbanger hairdos
antagonized by tugged t-shirts
sock-less feet stuffed into unlaced shoes
silent smiles shared

last glance at the bustling stream
once churning with giggles and sun fire,
coursing darker now.
light abandoning
to flirt with blushing clouds

i'm with stef on the gerund (ing word) count in the 2nd verse. it wouldn't be that hard to change at least 3 of them.

for me hop works better on the second line.
silent smiles shared i good poetically but here feels a little forced.

it reads as though it's about skinny dipping, if so then the smile line i said wasn't needed would work as a last line i think.

the 1st verse for me was great, brought back a few memories hehe.