10-06-2011, 04:26 AM
hey, tinkered with it again. i think it does change it, and works, but input always appreciated.
Soria, thanks for the feedback! I thought I did make a tone switch halfway through, switching from questions to the speaker's own solid definition of birds. it is entirely possible that it is not strong enough. The title is easy enough to switch to a degree, especially if you think it weakens the poem from the onset.
Appreciate both of your assistance with this, it has helped immensely.
Soria, thanks for the feedback! I thought I did make a tone switch halfway through, switching from questions to the speaker's own solid definition of birds. it is entirely possible that it is not strong enough. The title is easy enough to switch to a degree, especially if you think it weakens the poem from the onset.
Appreciate both of your assistance with this, it has helped immensely.
Written only for you to consider.