APPLAUSE

[ICSoria]

One question for ICSoria: when I read the "each" and "every" lines in my head they flow well as they are, or at least better than they would the other way around, so is your suggestion based objectively on meter or a personal sense of rhyhtm?

Objectively:
S1L1 is Trochaic Heptameter, while S2L2 is Iambic Heptameter--after suggested changes. Additionally, S1L2 is Iambic Heptameter while S2L2 is Iambic Octameter, with suggested change. You might also consider removing “facial” to cut that line one foot shorter. It is clear what is meant by tic. This line is also Iambic, but only if you somewhat contort the last word’s stress.
I do not like to get into rewriting anyone’s poem but one such as this could benefit with a bit more consistency throughout. A bit of modulation in a longer poem is not unusual and usually prevents it from becoming overly tedious in reading but it should not be too obvious.

Sid