Defining Birds

[billy]

Ask me
What is a bird?

Is it a patchwork of feathers is 'is it' needed?
Sewn with a beak and straw legs? does it need a comma after sewn.

A music box
Waiting to be turned in the trees? good lines

Or it must be a symbol of liberty, for me this would be better as a question.
Knowing no borders, nesting in alcoves and
The nooks of porches.

No, no.
I find a bird to be no more

Than a man
Searching for the best patch of sun.
A vacation home in Guatemala. A time share in my mulberry. cute

A bird is a man with two addresses,
Two homes crafted by the same beak.

Two hiding places. Two nests
Where he is jury and judge.

I think of birds this way
To make them not so different,

Wings, only a means
To get from here to home.

i like the metaphor of the bird as to how it represents the aspects of man

i think the use of the "man" word diluted the extended metaphor and wonder if the "man" could be changed to something less obvious. (sadly i have no suggestions.)

i did like the form of the poem. it had a symmetry that worked well with the theme f the poem. (jmo)

thanks for the read.