10-04-2011, 12:05 AM
Hi John,
Time is sometimes hard to come by so it's taken me a while to get around to posting, but I have read this one a few times already and I like it. I'll be honest, the rhythm that's happening feels interrupted to me at time. I count four stresses per line, but the syllables between seem erratic. The first couplet, to me is in perfect rythym, but some of the shorter lines felt awkward to my newbie toungue.
of women wooed and battles fought.
(of WOMen WOOED and BATtles FOUGHT.)?
I am reading this as iambic tetrameter . . .
It makes me think that I am missing something here. Are you counting stresses only and varying the unstressed counts?
Time is sometimes hard to come by so it's taken me a while to get around to posting, but I have read this one a few times already and I like it. I'll be honest, the rhythm that's happening feels interrupted to me at time. I count four stresses per line, but the syllables between seem erratic. The first couplet, to me is in perfect rythym, but some of the shorter lines felt awkward to my newbie toungue.
of women wooed and battles fought.
(of WOMen WOOED and BATtles FOUGHT.)?
I am reading this as iambic tetrameter . . .
It makes me think that I am missing something here. Are you counting stresses only and varying the unstressed counts?