***(i am dreaming)
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i like this, a few syntax problems, 'wells' is left out there on it's own and it should be 'raising' not rising, love the 6th line. should it be 'plain trees'.
the last two lines are very poignant comparing dreams.
thanks for the read

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***(i am dreaming) - by bogpan - 10-03-2011, 01:18 AM
RE: ***(i am dreaming) - by Aish - 10-03-2011, 01:32 AM
RE: ***(i am dreaming) - by Ca ne fait rien - 10-03-2011, 03:48 AM
RE: ***(i am dreaming) - by billy - 10-03-2011, 03:30 PM
RE: ***(i am dreaming) - by bogpan - 10-03-2011, 10:26 PM
RE: ***(i am dreaming) - by addy - 10-04-2011, 09:14 AM



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