Dreams of Flight

[ICSoria]

an absolute wowser,
i though i was i for an Orville and Wright moment but none of it.
the 1st verse really sucked me in, the 2nd lapped my face and said wake up stupid, we're talking about the real world here.
the 3rd, was more genteel, it was full of happenings, and the last was quite poignant, i loved the last line as though he was making a final mark, that "period" the ends the play, or poem or chapter.
if i had a nit it would be the two dreams, could one be changed? jmo

thanks for the read sid, this is my fave of yours so far.

Billy,
I greatly value opinions here, therefore any compliments are considered high praise indeed. Thank you for that. I was quite nervous about showing this as it has gone through much revision. I have never been completely satisfied with it so it changed quite a bit structurally, since I first began it several years back. Always, my biggest fear is in saying too much.
You made a valid point and made me think I may indeed have at least one too many dreams in the piece and will attempt a fix
I appreciate your taking the time.

Sid