you killed me mom

[billy]

hi again karren

a couple of things,
1, you need to show us with images.
2, you need to get rid of every single word that doesn't count, or add something

mommy it’s so dark in here
but i know i don’t have to fear
i can’t see anything
but it’s a glorious feeling

mommy it’s so dark
i can’t see
but it’s a glorious feeling.

if you can do something similar to the rest of the poem, it will be stronger, and easier to add images to it.
there is one other thing, if it's you, it's you. not u. unless you want a text style poem, in which case use text style throughout
eg, 4 for four, 2 for to etc. at the moment i think you need to bring the poem out of all the packing it's in.
after that we can help with the other stuff.