the points i would have mentioned have already been said, redundancies, enjambment, (the historical end word and recording end word to name two)
i seriously like the feel and tone of the piece.
the first 5 lines are for me excellent. there is an awful lot to like about this piece.
in parts it reminds me of Ralph Mactell's streets of london.
some really strong lines and good images. though the senses do get overloaded a few times, (which isn't really a bad thing )
thanks for the read.
i seriously like the feel and tone of the piece.
the first 5 lines are for me excellent. there is an awful lot to like about this piece.
in parts it reminds me of Ralph Mactell's streets of london.
some really strong lines and good images. though the senses do get overloaded a few times, (which isn't really a bad thing )
thanks for the read.