my first post: love is...

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Hi Karren,
[ind] It's always good to see somebody new posting. I like your poem very much and can see a lot of potential in it. I am a newbie to poetry, so take my suggestions as such and not like I'm trying to put you down. Just an honest opinion.

Knowing what I had -- the opening line of a poem needs to grab the reader's attention. I can see where you going with the rue of a great loss, but I think you could find a more fresh way to get that across that might jumpstart you poem. JMO
Feeling really bad
Lost it all that night
Can no longer fight

Life is different when you're all alone
Got nothing to do but cry and play your song

Strumming guitar strings
Staring at my ring
Recalling the past
Love I thought would last

Love is hard when you walk on a one way street --I like the message in these lines, but I think you could say it a little more creatively. I had higlighted a few words I think you can do without alltogether.
And all you can hear is your own heartbeat --I would also think about changing 'heartbeat' to 'heart beat.' It'll rhyme better cause together it's stress is 'HEARTbeat', but seperated the stresses would be more even so 'beat' can stand alone as a nice rhyme for 'street'

Staring at my face
Thinking of that place
Playing our love song
Where did we go wrong?

Love is crazy when you're the only one
Looking for something that's been gone

Crying once again
Wish it didn't end
Wiping tears away
Know I'll be okay

Love is one extraordinary feeling
One day I'll find my happy ending --up until the end here, you've been rhyming steadily, but this one misses. (though both words end in 'ing' the stress doesn't fall on that syllable and 'feel' and 'end' don't rhyme.
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All in all I think you have a nice poem and a good first post. Thanks for sharing, Karren, see you around.