09-28-2011, 04:46 PM
I love "post-equinox nights"... immediately you establish an earthy and magical mood. Well done. The rest of the poem nicely follows suit.
your final stanza was wonderfully striking; the literal idea of settling in for the coming days, coupled with a more spiritual sense to the act of "gathering inwards". I would've liked the last stanza to be slightly extended, evoking slowness/ deliberateness, but I think that's just me being greedy 'cause I really liked it
Nice job, i would say
your final stanza was wonderfully striking; the literal idea of settling in for the coming days, coupled with a more spiritual sense to the act of "gathering inwards". I would've liked the last stanza to be slightly extended, evoking slowness/ deliberateness, but I think that's just me being greedy 'cause I really liked it
Nice job, i would say
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?