Brother Death

[billy]

Thank you for your original comment. When you removed those two lines I hope you didn't "gut" the poem. The poet is always more intimate (no pun intended) with the poem than the critic is.

I'm going to get murdered here... I often use no punctuation at all in my poems. I like instead to use line breaks and white spaces. They achieve the same objective as punctuation does in my humble opinion.

then my work here is done
we're all in the same boat, on one of my poems, the bastards told me i didn't need two lines of an 8 line poem. they were right of course, but i did want to defend the poem, that said, i removed the lines, and hopefully by doing so it will help me in the next one i write.
i always or mostly use small case letters in replies. in my poems i try to use what grammar i need

which is exactly what i mean. I often use no punctuation at all in my poems. I like instead to use line breaks and white spaces.

i said in my poems i try to use what grammar i need which is what you say you do. i sometimes write a poem without any grammar. and white space if used properly can make a poem better.

as for my poem. i took the lines out because i saw they were correct and i felt it would be silly to not do something i felt was correct
the truth is i'm grateful they took the time to workshop my poem.

sadly (and i know i should spend more time on it) i only have a short amount of time to write, because of working on the forum, and i spend a fair amount of my free time replying to the other guys. ( i enjoy it, it isn't a chore hehe) so they help me a lot to see what i've missed.