Silence

[bogpan]

This is chillingly beautiful. I love how it escapes seeming arrogant and whiny, yet is of course tormented, terse. I also like that you used an epigraph, something I sometimes do and am criticised for My one suggestion would be that you change "of" to "on" in the last line of the first verse, as that seems more grammatically sound.

"arrogant and whiny"-these words cause maximum surprise. Nobody has commented similarly this poem. In our tradition it is completely normal to quote part or whole verse - that's another difference with European practice. I would think your proposal for change. Thanks for your opinion.