Trees

[billy]

Wonderful poem Patrick. You know I'm "different"... so I'm going to say something diferent. Leanne and Billy are correct about the syllable count... but... sometimes a small error strengthens a poem. Poetry doesn't have to be chamber music. It can be jazz. I like to add a "jar" or two... keeps the critics on their toes.

no it doesn't unlike a planned or premeditated error, which is usually spotted, an error is usually just that, an error. take you spelling of different for instance, while i'm not a grammar nazi, the error doesn't enhance the sentence, to do that you would have had to type something like, "Diff 'o' rant"
while an error may add something it isn't something that should be encouraged. that you think meter akin to chamber music is another misconception
and if you write to keep us on our toes you're losing the reason for poetry. critics are much more likely to pass over poets who add jars to test them
my advice to anyone who feels they should post in mild critique is to learn as much of the poetry craft as you can before breaking it.
we have three maybe four people here capable of that. i'm not one of them and neither is anyone else here. we have to help other poets, not nudge em to jar the critics. and again, don't take offence, this is honest feedback without any malice. ><