09-27-2011, 04:26 PM
I liked this, although I don't normally like rhyming couplets. But L15 stopped me cold. I felt an extra syl there at "would" and wanted to read it "For many years he'd sit and think" then dropped the "He" in L16 to make 8 syls in each line. But I am a little nuts on syllable counts. L18 stopped me too, but I couldn't think of what to do with it. Maybe "under that tree up on the hill."
You did a lot better with this form than I could have done and overall I thought it a wonderful poem.