09-27-2011, 10:35 AM
after reading both of them i think they're both as valid as the other.
they stand alone as separate poems, while the first is tighter, the latter is more expressive with
a more drawn out imagery,
the hendrix line being a prime example, the use of faintly adds an extra depth to the picture.
i suppose the ideal would be somewhere in between the two but from here, they both look good and stand on their own merit. (jmo)
they stand alone as separate poems, while the first is tighter, the latter is more expressive with
a more drawn out imagery,
the hendrix line being a prime example, the use of faintly adds an extra depth to the picture.
i suppose the ideal would be somewhere in between the two but from here, they both look good and stand on their own merit. (jmo)