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#9
09-25-2011, 05:34 PM
Oh, I do love "piqued sunshine"! I'm not entirely sold on "swiftly" where it is, but I do like the idea of contrasting it with "cautiously" -- what would you think of reversing L3&4?

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rinsed - by writeitout - 09-23-2011, 11:11 PM
RE: rinsed - by abu nuwas - 09-23-2011, 11:26 PM
RE: rinsed - by Wildcard - 09-24-2011, 12:13 AM
RE: rinsed - by Aish - 09-24-2011, 02:33 AM
RE: rinsed - by writeitout - 09-24-2011, 02:48 AM
RE: rinsed - by Todd - 09-24-2011, 03:31 AM
RE: rinsed - by billy - 09-24-2011, 06:10 AM
RE: rinsed - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-25-2011, 06:08 AM
RE: rinsed - by Leanne - 09-25-2011, 05:34 PM
RE: rinsed - by addy - 09-28-2011, 11:14 AM



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