09-24-2011, 12:50 AM
(09-23-2011, 10:18 PM)only rob Wrote: Phlegm PoemsLine 3- not only is ait a wonderful line imagery-wise, it is sonically too.
I can’t drive my car
to love, or
evict my midnight vision
from mars,
but when I cough these
breathless autumn poems,
I see my funeral
in her eyes.
The poem is tight and evocative. even though it may be something one may not really want evoked. Powerful stuff here , Rob. I think the line breaks are perfect.