rinsed
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Hi Renee,

This is such a sad little poem Sad I love it though.

'piqued sunshine painted forging water' is gorgeous! I am jealous of this line
Overall, I think you have done a great job and not overdone at all. I thought maybe 'dulled' should be just 'dull', but it's a small nit.

Thanks for sharing.
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rinsed - by writeitout - 09-23-2011, 11:11 PM
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RE: rinsed - by Wildcard - 09-24-2011, 12:13 AM
RE: rinsed - by Aish - 09-24-2011, 02:33 AM
RE: rinsed - by writeitout - 09-24-2011, 02:48 AM
RE: rinsed - by Todd - 09-24-2011, 03:31 AM
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RE: rinsed - by Leanne - 09-25-2011, 05:34 PM
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