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summer stares the grass brown
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09-21-2011, 10:54 AM
I rather like this. It's vague yet sewn together with crisp images. My one nit would be the first line. I find it gruesome and Edgar Allan Poe-ish. As your following lines evoke a sensual serenity it seems out of place. Other than that though this is lovely. Makes me picture love making in a sunlit meadow.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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summer stares the grass brown - by John Holland - 09-21-2011, 09:39 AM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by Leanne - 09-21-2011, 09:44 AM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by Todd - 09-21-2011, 10:21 AM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by Wildcard - 09-21-2011, 10:50 AM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by heslopian - 09-21-2011, 10:54 AM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by Aish - 09-21-2011, 01:19 PM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-22-2011, 12:58 AM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by John Holland - 09-22-2011, 06:20 AM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by billy - 09-22-2011, 12:26 PM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by addy - 09-22-2011, 03:51 PM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by abu nuwas - 09-22-2011, 06:20 PM
RE: summer stares the grass brown - by only rob - 09-23-2011, 02:35 AM
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