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09-20-2011, 09:59 AM
it feels like a good train of thought. each stanza stanza alone. (i couldn't resist the play on words, but it is so) I had to look up Deere. I'm glad i did because it makes the verse shine. i like the "so i" who it reminds me of escapes me, but it becomes personal even to the reader. nitty picking i know but i thought 1 but too many. also; would 'over Ameriky’s' work better on the line below it? great read, thanks. |
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Newbe post - by only rob - 09-19-2011, 10:29 PM
RE: Newbe post - by Leanne - 09-20-2011, 05:43 AM
RE: Newbe post - by billy - 09-20-2011, 09:59 AM
RE: Newbe post - by addy - 09-20-2011, 10:27 AM
RE: Newbe post - by Patrick Traveler - 09-20-2011, 07:24 PM
RE: Newbe post - by abu nuwas - 09-21-2011, 05:13 AM
RE: Newbe post - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-21-2011, 07:39 AM
RE: Newbe post - by only rob - 09-21-2011, 09:02 PM
RE: Newbe post - by cvillelisa - 09-24-2011, 08:14 AM
RE: Newbe post - by grannyjill - 09-25-2011, 04:27 AM
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