Misogynist
#7
Thanks for your kind words and feedback Todd. The third verse was heavily edited before reaching its current form, which is why the first line is as long as it is. Originally the following four were about the same length. I'll make "like the strain of some disease" its own line and remove "flows among your bones". Cheers for the suggestion.
"All day" in the second stanza was supposed to indicate his most recent tunnelling, not the whole journey.
Thanks again ToddSmile
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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Misogynist - by heslopian - 09-19-2011, 08:04 AM
RE: Misogynist - by Wildcard - 09-19-2011, 08:25 AM
RE: Misogynist - by Aish - 09-19-2011, 08:27 AM
RE: Misogynist - by heslopian - 09-19-2011, 08:45 AM
RE: Misogynist - by Todd - 09-20-2011, 04:05 AM
RE: Misogynist - by Wildcard - 09-20-2011, 04:16 AM
RE: Misogynist - by heslopian - 09-20-2011, 04:26 AM
RE: Misogynist - by Leanne - 09-20-2011, 05:33 AM
RE: Misogynist - by heslopian - 09-20-2011, 06:09 AM
RE: Misogynist - by billy - 09-20-2011, 10:36 AM
RE: Misogynist - by heslopian - 09-20-2011, 11:46 AM
RE: Misogynist - by abu nuwas - 09-21-2011, 03:52 AM



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