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[billy]

Passing round rub on tattoos
a stage hand weaves between tripods, great two openers, the images are strong.
some erected, some discarded.
The bed is made, lights are set.
All the best technology
surrounds this simple scene. would it work better if split here, creating two verse
When viewed by lonely men in rooms good strong sad image
dark and close, like time capsules,
the red faced director
might never have breathed.
Actors cast aside the sheets,
think of home and click their heels.

you show the working side of it nicely though for me the last line feels forced, (the 'and click their heels' part)
some really good down to earth images carry it well. i like how you used erect in a non sexual way.

thanks for the read jack,