Bought and Still Paying:
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(09-16-2011, 05:03 PM)billy Wrote:  The tongue flip-flops.
Swan lake of the flounder family
thrashing between tides I really liked this line in tandem with the one below it.
of a coarse lipped mouth
venal bitch with ass-burger syndrome Such a great word play on Asperger's!
bad-breathed and greasy,
her dentures dancing in the glass
she worries food, and men I can see this vividly.
gumming; a toothless crush
"where's the fucking ketchup"
she spits, as I walk out.

a small edit based on feedback from Todd and AA Smile
This was a good chuckle, Billy. Cheers!

PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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Messages In This Thread
Bought and Still Paying: - by billy - 09-16-2011, 05:03 PM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by Wildcard - 09-16-2011, 08:43 PM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by Todd - 09-16-2011, 10:52 PM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by billy - 09-17-2011, 06:48 AM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by Aish - 09-18-2011, 12:31 AM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by grannyjill - 09-18-2011, 02:52 AM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by billy - 09-19-2011, 10:12 AM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-26-2011, 04:18 AM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by billy - 09-26-2011, 05:08 PM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by Ca ne fait rien - 09-27-2011, 06:25 AM
RE: Bought and Still Paying: - by billy - 09-27-2011, 11:31 AM



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