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[Todd]

Really funny!

The tongue flip-flops.
Swan lake of the flounder family
thrashing between tides
of a course lipped mouth--did you mean coarse?
venal bitch with ass-burger syndrome--ass-burger is clever. Love it.
bad breathed and greasy,--a hypen between bad-breathed perhaps
her dentures dancing in the glass
she worries food, and men
gumming with a toothless crush
"where's the fucking ketchup"
she spits, and i walk out.--maybe as instead of and

I didn't have any real issues with this Billy. I thought it was funny and good.

Best,

Todd