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Carnival, a haiku
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09-15-2011, 07:51 PM
The original piece works the best, IMO. I also believe that keeping the syllable count true is important. Unless I am stepping into a private joke here. And there is no "on"... Just "of" and it should stay.
Do you realise that memories are like a bag of wooden nickels... Or a field full of men on wooden legs in a flash flood... useless ~ D.A.
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Carnival, a haiku - by heslopian - 09-03-2011, 01:40 PM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by billy - 09-03-2011, 03:47 PM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by heslopian - 09-03-2011, 04:37 PM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by billy - 09-03-2011, 04:46 PM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by heslopian - 09-04-2011, 05:47 AM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by billy - 09-04-2011, 09:33 AM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by Leanne - 09-04-2011, 09:37 AM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by heslopian - 09-04-2011, 09:40 AM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by Leanne - 09-04-2011, 09:42 AM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by billy - 09-04-2011, 09:42 AM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by heslopian - 09-04-2011, 09:49 AM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by billy - 09-07-2011, 03:59 PM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by LaGitana - 09-15-2011, 07:51 PM
RE: Carnival, a haiku - by heslopian - 09-16-2011, 02:21 AM
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