09-14-2011, 05:33 AM
Thanks Jack. I appreciate the kind words. I know what you mean though. When I first started writing this it became something much longer but I wasn't happy with most of it, and I thought you know I think the poem is just this one observation. I decided to post it here to see if it could stand on its own. I was reminded of one of my favorite poems by A.R. Ammons:
Their Sex Life by A. R. Ammons
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There's always something that makes me want to keep cutting away at a poem till I get something that has a condensed power to it. I seem to write a lot and then pare it down as small as I can make it. I sometimes wonder if I should put up the larger things here.
Well, enough ramble from me. Thanks again.
Their Sex Life by A. R. Ammons
One failure on
Top of another
There's always something that makes me want to keep cutting away at a poem till I get something that has a condensed power to it. I seem to write a lot and then pare it down as small as I can make it. I sometimes wonder if I should put up the larger things here.
Well, enough ramble from me. Thanks again.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson