09-14-2011, 04:59 AM
Billy,
Well done. Very imaginative. One line clanks for me.
"I don't remember how to cry."
I sense what you are going for here, (I don't feel anymore. I am numb) can't put my finger on what is not working for me. Wish I could be more articulate about this.
pete
Well done. Very imaginative. One line clanks for me.
"I don't remember how to cry."
I sense what you are going for here, (I don't feel anymore. I am numb) can't put my finger on what is not working for me. Wish I could be more articulate about this.
pete