09-13-2011, 10:57 AM
Heslopian,
Thank you for your comments. I have to sit with that last stanza awhile longer and see what arises. It is clearly not satisfying. I've gotten some great suggestions on what to do with it, including cutting it completely.
Gratitude,
pete
LaGitana,
Thanks for the feedback. You've done a great job capturing the essence of the piece and some of its challenges.
I've learned a lot going through the editing process. My thanks to you.
pete
Thank you for your comments. I have to sit with that last stanza awhile longer and see what arises. It is clearly not satisfying. I've gotten some great suggestions on what to do with it, including cutting it completely.
Gratitude,
pete
LaGitana,
Thanks for the feedback. You've done a great job capturing the essence of the piece and some of its challenges.
I've learned a lot going through the editing process. My thanks to you.
pete