Lovely work Jack. Didn't know what to expect when I read the title of the poem but you surprised me in a good way. "..When viewed by lonely men in rooms--dark and close, like time capsules...", that's just gorgeous. My only nit would be that the opening lines are intriguing but muddle the dramatic heart of the poem for me, just imo. If yactually think it's interesting if you just start with "All the best technology..." and proceed from there, but that's just my own perspective 
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?