09-10-2011, 03:56 AM
After a few days here I see that in this world, I am rookie number one.
As a musician, I am sometimes irritated by anxious amatuers and their 'discoveries.' What they think is the shiniest penny looks like its been run over by a train and shat on by a dinosaur to me. It's always the same guy. He bounces up wanting to play my guitar at shows, between sets. He plays the same shit as the last guy, as if they have meetings on Wednesday's at the volunteer fire department.
Most of these guys haven't learned one complete song ever, but without fail, they have written a song of their own for your listening pleasure. :flipped:
If I am gonna understand the poems that you people write, I am gonna have to do some serious study. :p I have just started 'The Ode Less Travelled,' so I may post a lot of iambic pentameter soon . . .
Billy,
I am still working through Todd's post. Thanks for your suggestions. I will definitely take them to heart.
I played with the first two lines around a little, but I am still not sure about that one.
Leanne:
I am trying to get some imagery into my stuff and show more. The 'stained glass' thing is a little trite, I guess, but it did everything that I needed it to do: represent pretty, intricate and delicate.
Thanks for the puncuation suggestions. Although I've always read a lot, I never could seem to get the hang of the ellipsis or the semi-colon. But I have a book on that too
'awed by everything' should be one line - why didn't I think of that? . . . of course it should.
I might change the last line, but I like the way it looks matching the earlier 'refrain(?)'
In Fry's book's introduction, he is talking about everybody having the tools to be a poet and unlike other art forms we all practice the units of poetry everyday when we communicate with others and I couldn't believe I'd never considered it that way. So I'm learning the rules now . . . :cla:
As a musician, I am sometimes irritated by anxious amatuers and their 'discoveries.' What they think is the shiniest penny looks like its been run over by a train and shat on by a dinosaur to me. It's always the same guy. He bounces up wanting to play my guitar at shows, between sets. He plays the same shit as the last guy, as if they have meetings on Wednesday's at the volunteer fire department.
Most of these guys haven't learned one complete song ever, but without fail, they have written a song of their own for your listening pleasure. :flipped:
If I am gonna understand the poems that you people write, I am gonna have to do some serious study. :p I have just started 'The Ode Less Travelled,' so I may post a lot of iambic pentameter soon . . .
Billy,
I am still working through Todd's post. Thanks for your suggestions. I will definitely take them to heart.
I played with the first two lines around a little, but I am still not sure about that one.
Leanne:
I am trying to get some imagery into my stuff and show more. The 'stained glass' thing is a little trite, I guess, but it did everything that I needed it to do: represent pretty, intricate and delicate.
Thanks for the puncuation suggestions. Although I've always read a lot, I never could seem to get the hang of the ellipsis or the semi-colon. But I have a book on that too
'awed by everything' should be one line - why didn't I think of that? . . . of course it should.
I might change the last line, but I like the way it looks matching the earlier 'refrain(?)'
In Fry's book's introduction, he is talking about everybody having the tools to be a poet and unlike other art forms we all practice the units of poetry everyday when we communicate with others and I couldn't believe I'd never considered it that way. So I'm learning the rules now . . . :cla: