some good internal rhythms going on leanne, also has some great alliteration on L4, 5, 7, and 8.
the last verse is poignant, i get the feeling it's more a love story of learning than the physical thing. not because of the pupil reference but because of the last verse. i love the the first verse, though retrograde feels to be more personal to the writer than the reader (i think) that said it does add to the poem and the feel of what's being said. maybe an old professor though i doubt it. anyway, i can't fault the writing of the thing, it stands a lone as an extremely well written poem, that has more emotion in it than the reader first assumes. jmo
thanks for the read.
the last verse is poignant, i get the feeling it's more a love story of learning than the physical thing. not because of the pupil reference but because of the last verse. i love the the first verse, though retrograde feels to be more personal to the writer than the reader (i think) that said it does add to the poem and the feel of what's being said. maybe an old professor though i doubt it. anyway, i can't fault the writing of the thing, it stands a lone as an extremely well written poem, that has more emotion in it than the reader first assumes. jmo
thanks for the read.