I am the Boss

[Wildcard]

I am the Boss

If you wanted a reaction, (many of the lines seem more complex than they need to be. Sometimes simple is better, maybe: If you want a reaction, you shouldn't look here)
you shouldn't have looked here.
no more crying,
never again a tear.

Its easy to say, (your meter doesn't seem consistent, but Leanne will get you going with that soon enough. She is a pro.)
when you look in,
knowing what you may,
this battle you'll never win.

There is a fine line,
loved ones do cross.
I am hardened through time
be what it may I am the boss.

Did you wash the hands,
of the fingers you pointed.
you and your angry demands
will not get you what you wanted.

Amazing your timing is,
with the lashings you bring,
do you feel better,
now your angry heart sang?

So easily you judge,
so little you know,
in with the hurt, (this is my favorite line. It raps up nicely and says a lot about this man who takes but does not give)
then out the door you go.

As I am still finding my way,
my life has been thrown off,
all the hurtful things that you could say,
mean nothing I am not soft.

How easy to forget, (In this part, does 'you' mean the swine or the narrator?)
how hard it was for you,
all the standards never met,
all the days you spent blue.

So judge me all you like,
I will not react to you,
for what is good I will fight,
you couldn't walk a mile in my shoes.

Maddie

Maddie, your poem is so honest. It drew me in from the beginning and even though I felt the wording got a little jumbled now and then, the revealing nature of the poem made me like you and your story so much that I thoroughly enjoyed it. That's a powerful tool in writing anything: the ability to 'win' from the reader or listener the right of their interest. With a little digging in the novice forum, I'd be willing to bet you can tighten up this poem and have it all shiney before you know it!
Oh, and for newbies like me, reading your poetry and hearing your questions are great. It gives me new perspective hearing the same (or nearly the same) advice I've gotten applied to a poem that I can be objective about. By posting more of your work and asking more questions, you are making it better for all the newcomers. Just saying . . . keep posting for sure.[/b]