Faith's Panorama

[Todd]

Jack,

Now that we've dealt with the woeful history of colonialism Let me give you some comments:

Squares, churches, rusting doors,
celebrations in the streets
of some dusty old village.

S1 has nice tight phrasing and good images. No nits from me.

A sombre thought for those same folk--I'm getting ahead of myself but I'm not fully sold on S3. I would be tempted to rename the title Faith's Sterotypes, cut S3, and replace same folk with urbanites. That may be drastic but I sort of like what that would do. Something to think about
in a rec room, cold and close,--I really like cold and close
where evening prayers are sometimes held.

Anger at both these stereotypes,
the peasants and the urbanites,
in those who understand neither.

Our atheists are cold as beer,
our soul cleansers are blind as holes.
Above it all the sky observes.--these three lines are almost a poem in themselves. I really like the payoff of it all. Great lines, great images

So, I hope some of that was helpful Jack, whatever you choose to go with.

Best,

Todd