09-06-2011, 09:04 AM
Would the first line of the third verse feel less preachy if instead of "stereotypes" I put "worshipping kinds"?
Neither of the "ours" are needed, but I think they add an air of intimacy. I think removing them would make the verse seem didactic somehow.
Thanks for your feedback and kind words Bilbo
Neither of the "ours" are needed, but I think they add an air of intimacy. I think removing them would make the verse seem didactic somehow.
Thanks for your feedback and kind words Bilbo
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