Dark Obsession

[Todd]

Hi,

Welcome to the site!

A couple quick things to think about:

If your title is Dark Obsession than your first line doesn't need to be. Let your title do some work for you.

Also, to add to the comments about imagery, think of ways that an image can express an emotion.

cover my eyes with misery

could become something like

cover my eyes with storm clouds

Or any picture that conveys the specific type of misery you mean.

Again, glad to read your post