Dark Obsession

[billy]

hi AA, great to see you posting.

william wordsworth wrote;

I wandered lonely as a cloud
That floats on high o'er vales and hills,
When all at once I saw a crowd,
A host, of golden daffodils;
Beside the lake, beneath the trees,
Fluttering and dancing in the breeze.
if you read every line the thing you'll see is an image. the term thats used to describe this phenomenon is "show not tell" your poem, every poem has the ability to show the reader an image instead of just teling us what happened.


Spirals floating,
you can add an image by writing it as
{type of here] spirals foating, or
spirals [of type] floating.
there are other way you can show imagery such as through metaphor, simile etc but just try the easy ways first. if you can add a couple of images in each verse it will lift your poem a huge amount.

thanks for posting
hope to see more