Kristallnacht

[billy]

Stormtroopers for me SA stormtroopers or brownshirts would have held more power.
curse break and steal curse, break and steal, feels a little weak considering wit was the onslaught of the holocaust, for me these three words should be really powerful and strong.
in tinkling murmurs as is as needed?

crisp glass shivers, snaps love this line
concusses again it feels a little weak, would something like smashes work, as an example?
through the November night. would it read better as through November nights. as what happened did so over two nights at the beginning.
Lives disappear. Triumphant, for me the period spoils the meaning and the enjambment, without it, it's the best line of the poem and perfect a perfect enjambment

vandals
ransack and burn the soul of God. beautiful poignant line

Demonic gingerbread
will bake in greedy
ovens. the last verse though ominous feels too obvious, for me the poem ended after God.

it seems i had a lot to say but don't be fooled. i really really like what you have going here as a great core. the poem is obviously about the start of the holocaust, a much finer point to make than the killing to follow. we all know how people died and are all to some extent ashamed. but this get to the first days. the days that should have really mattered to the german peoples. it begs the question why. a very sad piece that for me needs to be as powerful as those two nights were. THE START OF THE HOLOCAUST. it's the reason i said what i did about curse break and steal curse. for me they did much worse. defiled is too good a word to use but thats what they did to everyone alive and living. oops, i'm effin ranting aren't i. sorry Aish.

it is a good, better than good poem with the potential to be excellent. jmo
thanks for the read.