08-24-2011, 05:39 AM
I want to thank both of you for your gracious and helpful critiques. I sought to keep this short and tight in order to steer clear of rambling diatribes which I didn't feel would lend any more emotion or shed new light on such a polarizing event.
I have added two lines.
Abu, survivor artifacts and scrolls always make me shiver and softly weep. There is an energy to them that is palpable. I will consider your suggestion regarding the title.
Todd, are the line breaks alright?
I have added two lines.
Abu, survivor artifacts and scrolls always make me shiver and softly weep. There is an energy to them that is palpable. I will consider your suggestion regarding the title.
Todd, are the line breaks alright?
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?