Promenade (revised)

Promenade (revised)

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08-23-2011, 11:32 AM (This post was last modified: 08-23-2011, 11:32 AM by Todd.)

I think the edit works. It's always interesting the impact even small changes make. You could probably even eliminate your final period.

It's good work.

Best,

Todd

The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson

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Promenade (revised) - by Aish - 08-19-2011, 02:36 PM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by ckeo - 08-19-2011, 02:44 PM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by billy - 08-20-2011, 07:36 PM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by Aish - 08-23-2011, 07:53 AM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by billy - 08-23-2011, 11:21 AM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by Todd - 08-23-2011, 11:32 AM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by Aish - 08-23-2011, 03:27 PM

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