Promenade (revised)

Promenade (revised)

Aish

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08-19-2011, 02:36 PM

1st edit

At the foot of the world
I am the spider
in the center of pearlescent secrets

intentionally disguised
as delicate.

Original

Quote:
At the foot of the world,
I am the spider
in the center, of pearlescent secrets

intentionally disguised.
As delicate.

PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?

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Promenade (revised) - by Aish - 08-19-2011, 02:36 PM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by ckeo - 08-19-2011, 02:44 PM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by billy - 08-20-2011, 07:36 PM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by Aish - 08-23-2011, 07:53 AM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by billy - 08-23-2011, 11:21 AM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by Todd - 08-23-2011, 11:32 AM

RE: Promenade (revised) - by Aish - 08-23-2011, 03:27 PM

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