08-18-2011, 11:46 AM
for me the title feels misleading, after reading and seeing the vid i feel this is more a fan's tale.
(which could be my fault.) i don't know of the Trianon as a place, though i have recollections of an orchestra with the same name (i think)
the bus places the country as does 'on his jack'
the last 'on' in the 1st line makes me stumble
apart from those two points i thought it a good small write. the music was a bonus.
i wish i could have been more help. perhaps one of the others will be more clearer than I.
thanks for the read.
(which could be my fault.) i don't know of the Trianon as a place, though i have recollections of an orchestra with the same name (i think)
the bus places the country as does 'on his jack'
the last 'on' in the 1st line makes me stumble
apart from those two points i thought it a good small write. the music was a bonus.
i wish i could have been more help. perhaps one of the others will be more clearer than I.
thanks for the read.
