08-13-2011, 01:43 PM
(08-05-2011, 04:50 PM)billy Wrote: Listing from Port to starboard Listing? I'm unfamiliar with that term being used in such a context.A brilliant poem Bilbo. Disgusting yet profound. The last line is especially heart wrenching. I want to hug the narrator while at the same fearing that if I do I'll get piss and shit all over me
I tried to follow the line of urine
home. Slant wise
over yellowed snow
my staggered piss took me, Excellent use of line breaks from "Slant" to the comma.
up your garden path.
I dumped
on your pristine doorstep;
it was all i had left. "I"
capped a p in port on sid's heads up. to small an edit to do a complete copy
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe