08-11-2011, 02:48 PM
Well now, haven't you got that set pegged perfectly? 
I love what you're saying... I have a couple of suggestions on how you might say it slightly more rhythmically, though of course this is only from my own reading and might sound entirely different in your head.
I love what you're saying... I have a couple of suggestions on how you might say it slightly more rhythmically, though of course this is only from my own reading and might sound entirely different in your head.
(08-10-2011, 02:46 AM)ICSoria Wrote: They drift on past the bourgeoisie,
to kiss the host and bend the knee
to nonchalantly (remove , ) make their presence known;
Chanel, Lancôme, designer pheromone
exuding from their silky napes.
Legitimized, respected drunks
show off their social pedigrees
while all their twisted histories,
lie folded, hidden, tucked away,
and locked in golden steamer trunks.
I.C.Soria
©2011
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