Eggshell Dance (Slight Revisons)

[ICSoria]

normally it's just done in the one thread but it's okay as long as both are in the same opening post

for me the 'at' works and because of the change in the 2nd (though 'veiled indifference' has been fairly well used) L's 5 and 6 now become (for me) more logical.
a def edit for the better. jmo

thanks for the read.

Billy, Sorry about making an extra thread. I will make a point of keeping everything together next time. Thank you for taking the time and for advice about "veiled indifference." I will try to find something better but you have already helped me improve this so maybe I can afford not to get too rushed.

Sid