08-08-2011, 05:52 AM
i really liked the first verse.
i also enjoyed the rest but not as part of the 1st verse. all the other verses
remind me of movies and cover ups but i can't put the thing together.
the vignettes seem connected but stand apart. the last verse is self contained.
and so is the 4th but somehow they feel disconnected.
i'll come back for another go later, sorry i wasn't too constructive.
i also enjoyed the rest but not as part of the 1st verse. all the other verses
remind me of movies and cover ups but i can't put the thing together.
the vignettes seem connected but stand apart. the last verse is self contained.
and so is the 4th but somehow they feel disconnected.
i'll come back for another go later, sorry i wasn't too constructive.