08-07-2011, 06:29 AM
Hi Billy,
It's a fun read, and I love how the speaker was so giving to give the last of what he had. It reminds me of the Biblical story of the Widow's Mite. My only call out is the period on L3. Either I'd like to see the next word capitalized or the punctuation reworked. Other than that, the content was a lot of fun.
Best,
Todd
It's a fun read, and I love how the speaker was so giving to give the last of what he had. It reminds me of the Biblical story of the Widow's Mite. My only call out is the period on L3. Either I'd like to see the next word capitalized or the punctuation reworked. Other than that, the content was a lot of fun.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson